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20 November 2008 @ 07:45 am
Worldbuilding Snippet  
There is a kind of man whose teeth are like swords
And his jaw teeth like knives,
To devour the afflicted from the earth
And the needy from among men.


Proverbs 30:14



The vampire crouched by Cyclone, oozing necromantic magic. Jim was right. This one was old. It waited on all fours, like a dog that somehow sprouted humanoid limbs tipped with stiletto claws. The last lingering echoes of its humanity had faded long ago. It had become a thing, so revoltingly alien and frightening, it sent shivers down my spine.

Not an ounce of fat remained on its frame. Its thick skin clung so tightly to the steel-cable muscles, it resembled wax poured over an anatomy model made by a demented sculptor. Sharp bone protuberations broke the skin along its spine, creating a jagged ridge. Its nose was missing, not even a slit remain. Massive, lipless jaws jutted from its sickening face, revealing a forest of fangs embedded in crimson gums. A thick horn protruded from the back of its deformed skull. Its eyes glowed dark hungry red, like rubies thrust into the skull of a demon.
 
 
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edgyauthor[info]edgyauthor on November 20th, 2008 01:16 pm (UTC)
Love this. So much vivid description and vampire creepiness -- always a good thing. :)
suzanne mcleod[info]suzannemcleod on November 20th, 2008 02:16 pm (UTC)
Yay! Thank you for the fab snippet, now I want the rest of the book... *sigh*
e_booklover[info]e_booklover on November 20th, 2008 02:25 pm (UTC)
This is the point where I pinch myself to ensure I am awake, and go around the house turning on all the lights :).

Great snippet!
wednesday childe[info]wedschilde on November 20th, 2008 02:25 pm (UTC)
i like that.
mela_lyn: Gonzo Big Eyes[info]mela_lyn on November 20th, 2008 02:40 pm (UTC)
O.O ooooooooooooooooooo... Cool.
Mark Henry[info]mdhenry on November 20th, 2008 02:45 pm (UTC)
I love that your vampires are monsters! Creepies!
ilona_andrews[info]ilona_andrews on November 21st, 2008 11:55 am (UTC)
Thank you! :)
Meljean Brook[info]meljeanbrook on November 20th, 2008 02:55 pm (UTC)
I can has ur babies plz?
kthxbai
ilona_andrews[info]ilona_andrews on November 20th, 2008 03:13 pm (UTC)
Gordon says: "Can I watch you guys try?"
Meljean Brook[info]meljeanbrook on November 20th, 2008 09:02 pm (UTC)
whoo hoo! I'll take that as a 'yes'!
[info]mayakda on November 20th, 2008 02:56 pm (UTC)
I always appreciate how ugly and scary your vampires are!

And cool Proverbs quote ...
The Morrigan[info]winters_queen on November 20th, 2008 03:02 pm (UTC)
Such a tease. And April is so far away. *pout*
CharleeG: Marvin![info]charleeg on November 20th, 2008 03:43 pm (UTC)
Deliciously horrorific!
Ruthanne Reid[info]doortoriver on November 20th, 2008 09:11 pm (UTC)
Eeeeeexcellent!!